My aim is to thank employers for sending delegates and also encourage them to use our services in the future:
(any comments are welcome)
Thank you for sending two delegates on our Finance For Non Financial Managers Workshop which was held on the 24th and 25th of August 2011. From the enthusiasm and dedication we saw from them at the event I’m sure you will have already seen positive changes in their everyday performance.
I have posted their certificates off to them, and as a complementary service, I also attached a message from John Mitchell which will reinforce the key messages that were learnt on the course.
I have posted their certificates off to them, and as a complementary service, I also attached a message from John Mitchell which will reinforce the key messages that were learnt on the course.
For your interest, I have attached a copy of our Company profile, please feel free to browse through other areas of staff development that may interest you.
We look forward to hearing from you.
Kind regards,
5 Responses
name dropping
I would just insert the names of the employees that went on the programme, e.g. Thank you for sending Joe Bloggs and Linda Smith on our Finance For Non Financial Managers Workshop. I think it makes it a bit more personal.
Regards Scott
Specifics
As well as attaching names as mentioned above tell them what you can do for them more specifically.
ie, We guarantee to improve your sales results or customer satisfaction results etc etc
Create further opportunity
Why not send them a post-course evaluation questionnaire to gather information about how well the delegates take the learning back into the workplace. This may help with testimonials and also create further opportunities for selling your services.
Sue
Thank you everyone!
I used all of your advice and I am so happy with my final letter! Looks great and I love the idea of the questionaire!
Very professional!
Make it shorter
I think some of your sentences could be a bit shorter. For example:
From the enthusiasm and dedication we saw from them at the event I’m sure you will have already seen positive changes in their everyday performance.
….. might be better written as:
They participated enthusiastically during the event and I feel sure that you will have noticed performance improvements.
For your interest, I have attached a copy of our Company profile, please feel free to browse through other areas of staff development that may interest you.
… might be better written as:
Please look at the attached company profile and contact me if you identify any other areas of staff development that might interest your staff.
Such letters are vitally important – hope this helps!
Jane